Letting all young adults undertake some unpaid work helping people in the community isn't a good idea to build the next generation or society. The drawbacks for both sides are evident and proven in some countries. I agree that having a job is a rewarding way for teenagers to spend their free time and a great way to ...
Band: 7The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.Task Response:
-This is a well-organized essay, presenting ideas on both sides, developing these ideas effectively throughout the response, but the essay is too long, suggest to shrink it.Coherence and Cohesion:
-The organization is evident and cohesive devices are used, though rather mechanically.
- Help LinkLexical Resources:
-The lexical resource is sufficient to allow some flexibility and precision, and although there are a few choice errors.Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-Grammatical control is variable: some complex structures are produced accurately.