Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need

IELTS Writing Task 2 & Answer

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 IELTS General Essay Answers - #4002
Question:
Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with?
Answer 1
Advertisements have a huge influence on the choices of consumers. I do agree that it is serving the purpose of enticing people to buy items that are not essential and, at the same time, to introduce modern products that suggest we need to have to live an easy life.
Commercial more often cuts the shows on media we ...
By nam, 2021-01-10  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 264
Band: 6.5
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
Task Response:
-The prompt is not fully addressed, there is an attempt to discuss some ideas, but are limited.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-Each paragraph has a clear central topic, which is developed, and there is an effective use of cohesive devices.
Lexical Resources:
-The lexical resource is sufficient to allow some flexibility and precision, and although there are a few spelling errors.
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-There are attempts to produce complex sentence forms, but there is a lack of grammatical control, which can cause some difficulty for the reader.
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Answer 2
Advertisements usually push people to consume goods or services that are not of necessity. It's a common sense. But, we have to agree that advertising enlightens us of new items...
By IeMan Pranam, 2018-02-03  View full answer
Total words: 287
Band: NA
Answer 3
The purpose of advertising is to tell the consumer about any new product or service or any new promotion on the existing product and service. We need it so we can make good...
By Jade Lee, 2017-09-26  View full answer
Total words: 285
Band: NA
  • The conclusion is too simple, rewrite to summarize your points.
  • You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has AND(9) ABOUT(8) NEW(7); try to decrease duplicated words.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Introduction as start point.