Wealth does not necessarily guarantee happiness. To what extent do you agree with this statement? Provide reasons for your answer. Include relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

IELTS Writing Task 2 & Answer

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 IELTS General Essay Answers - #4003
Question:
Wealth does not necessarily guarantee happiness. To what extent do you agree with this statement? Provide reasons for your answer. Include relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Answer 1
For some people being rich or earning a plethora of money is everything, although the fact is that money cannot buy happiness. I absolutely agree with the statement mentioned above and provide significant reasons to support joyful life ideas in contrast with prosperity.
Firstly, money and stress are positively ...
By pushpraj, 2021-01-26  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 274
Band: 6.5
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
Task Response:
-The main ideas are extended and supported; the response is ok.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-There is a clear overall progression in the response, but somewhat mechanically, with occasional errors.Lexical Resources:
-Lexis is mainly appropriate for the task, though there are some errors in word choice and spelling.
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-There is a good range of complex structures, and many sentences have accurate grammar, bu punctuation and capitalization are sometimes faulty.
Answer 2
From ancient times, the wealth is what people usually think of. Wealth not only brings physical comfort to people, but also brings them happiness. So, to be one of the rich is...
By Kangshen Chang, 2018-02-03  View full answer
Total words: 329
Band: NA
  • You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has PEOPLE(9) THEY(8) WEALTH(7); try to decrease duplicated words.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Introduction as start point.
  • Suggest to use a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level. E.g., Conclusion seems too plain, try to polish it.
  • Suggest to refine coherence and cohesion by removing wordy linking words.
Answer 3
Many people believe that money is the key to happiness and that the more money you have the happier you become. Other people feel that having a lot of money actually causes more...
By Jade Lee, 2017-09-26  View full answer
Total words: 275
Band: NA
  • The introduction seems long, refine sentences.
  • You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has PEOPLE(12) MONEY(10) THAT(7); try to decrease duplicated words.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Paragraph 1 as start point.
  • Suggest to use a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level. E.g., Conclusion seems too plain, try to polish it.