In some countries, an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems due to overeating unhealthy food

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In some countries, an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems due to overeating unhealthy food. It is, therefore, necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
Answer 1
We cannot emphasize the importance of a healthy diet too much because junk food does harm our health...

First, the drawbacks are more than the merits if the government charges more tax on junk food, like chips, deep-fried food, etc...

Moreover, the tax could have a massive impact on the unhealthy food industry, leading to less sales and profits...

I believe there are better solutions than adding a tax on junk food to encourage people to eat healthy food...

In conclusion, it seems that increasing the tax on junk food is not the best solution to encourage the public to have a healthy diet since there are more disadvantages than benefits...
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IELTS Essay Format:
-Paragraph 2 is relatively short, try to enrich it.
-You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has food(16), healthy(11), diet(6), junk(6), that(6), tax(5), more(5); try to decrease duplicated words.
-High-ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing; suggest rephrasing some.
-Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level.
You may enhance "unemployment" point, which is a disadvantage to health.
Answer 2
The growth of the fast food industry has, without doubt, impacted the eating habits and the health of many societies worldwide...

From an economic point of view, higher taxes might seem sensible. In countries such as the USA, Australia, and Britain, the healthcare system spends a large part of its budget on people with diet-related health problems...

However, we must also consider which socio-economic groups consume fast food as the central part of their diet...

In conclusion, imposing a higher tax on fast food is not the answer. If the government chose to do this, it would only lead to greater poverty and families facing further hardship...
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Answer 3
It is undoubtedly true that people's eating habits have significantly changed over the past few years...

First, why do people argue that imposing higher taxes will benefit them. It is more likely that people, especially young children, will avoid having pizzas and burgers due to adding an extra load to their budgets...

Secondly, the other reason is the cost-effective feature of such foods over the other healthy food options...

However, there are many other ways to control this growing menace rather than increasing tax prices because most wealthy people often have these types of food, and making food costly would not make much difference for them...

To conclude, I think that rather than imposing more taxes on fast food, reducing prices of healthy food items and increasing their availability and awareness campaigns will help overcome the issue and improve their health...
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Answer 4
It has been seen that people prefer junk food to healthy food. To control this malaise, some people think that the government should come forward and lay high taxes on unhealthy food so that people prioritize healthy eating...

To begin with, when the government levies high taxes on junk food, people hesitate to buy this kind of food in large quantities as it might upset their budget...

On the other hand, I think there are different viable ways to motivate people to eat healthier food...

In conclusion, it has become vital to involve people in healthy food items, so the government, individuals, and society should come forward to change the fast-food world into a healthy world...
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Answer 5
The problem of unhealthiness among humans is escalating at a very high speed due to their eating habits...

The increase in demand for junk food is due to its low price and easy availability. By imposing heavy taxes on these products, the costs of unhealthy food will increase, so many people will not be able to afford it...

Moreover, increasing taxes on fast food will help the government generate revenue, which can be used in organic food farming, and the government may also use this income to spread awareness of the benefits of organic food among youngsters...

In conclusion, imposing heavy taxes is one of the solutions to the high consumption of fast food. Moreover, it will result in excellent and healthy eating habits among citizens...
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