Inventors are not as important to society as doctors

IELTS Writing Task 2 & Answer

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 IELTS General Essay Answers - #4011
Question:
Inventors are not as important to society as doctors. To what extent do you agree with this statement? Provide reasons for your answer. Include relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Answer 1
Many people think that doctors are useful people in society; but on the other hand, people's health is also a job of inventors who create new medicine, tool, and method to fight...
By Ranisa Tue, 2018-01-28  View full answer
Total words: 288
Band: NA
  • You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has AND(10) DOCTORS(8) FOR(8); try to decrease duplicated words.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Paragraph 1 as start point.
  • Suggest to use a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level. E.g., Introduction seems too plain, try to polish it.
Answer 2
Inventors are creative people who develop new ideas and products, whereas doctors are specialists who make us feel better when we are ill. I believe that both types of people...
By Jiabao Lam, 2017-10-01  View full answer
Total words: 256
Band: NA
  • You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has AND(11) DOCTORS(8) INVENTORS(7); try to decrease duplicated words.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Paragraph 2 as start point.
  • Suggest to use a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level. E.g., Paragraph 3 seems too plain, try to polish it.
  • Suggest to refine coherence and cohesion by removing wordy linking words.