Some people warn that the silver screen era is coming to an end and that people will eventually lose interest in going to the cinema

IELTS Writing Task 2 & Answer

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 IELTS General Essay Answers - #4016
Question:
Some people warn that the silver screen era is coming to an end and that people will eventually lose interest in going to the cinema. Do you agree or disagree with this view?
Answer 1
It is undoubtedly true that the trend of watching movies in cinema halls significantly dropped nowadays. A group of people claims that the thrill of visiting cinemas will decrease in the future as they are on the verge of their end. Though I agree with this view, apart from decreasing popularity, movie theatres will ...
By vaimik, 2020-11-23  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 284
Band: 6
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
Task Response:
-The logic and reasoning look good, but some sentences seem wordy and the ideas presented are not always developed and or relevant.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-Ideas are generally arranged coherently, and there is a clear overall progression.
Lexical Resources:
-Lexis is mainly appropriate for the task, though there are some errors in word choice.
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-There are attempts to produce complex sentence forms, but there is a lack of grammatical control, which can cause some difficulty for the reader.
Answer 2
Cinema is really popular amongst people in either before or now. However, some think that the age of silver screen is going to be over because people have more entertainment...
By Sandeep Parekh, 2018-01-21  View full answer
Total words: 313
Band: NA
  • The conclusion is too simple, rewrite to summarize your points.
  • You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has AND(11) THAT(6) MOVIE(6); try to decrease duplicated words.
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Conclusion as start point.
Answer 3
The cinema has been a popular form of entertainment for many decades. Even the silent films of the early twentieth century were loved by audiences around the world. Hollywood is...
By Jiabao Lam, 2017-10-01  View full answer
Total words: 263
Band: NA
  • High ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing, suggest to rephrase some of them. You can try to rewrite Conclusion as start point.
  • Suggest to use a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level. E.g., Introduction seems too plain, try to polish it.
  • Suggest to refine coherence and cohesion by removing wordy linking words.