The rising levels of congestion and air pollution found in most of the world's cities can be attributed directly to the rapidly increasing number of private cars in use

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Question:
The rising levels of congestion and air pollution found in most of the world's cities can be attributed directly to the rapidly increasing number of private cars in use. Discuss possible ways to encourage the use of public transport.
Answer 1
In a world of increasing environmental awareness, improved public transport represents the way of the future...

From an attitudinal perspective, people must first be convinced of the benefits of public transportation...

From a financial perspective, public transportation must be a clear and viable consumer benefit. In other words, it must be more affordable than driving to work daily...

From a logistical perspective, public transportation should be convenient for commuters. City planners and transport officials must ensure frequent and reliable public transportation is available for each citizen...

In conclusion, through a multi-pronged approach, it is possible to increase the use of public transportation...
Band: 8
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Answer 2
The issue of the increasing levels of traffic jams and air pollution is very problematic in most of the large cities...

On the one hand, there are various ways of decreasing the trend of driving private cars. Firstly, improving public transport such as trains or buses is the most important...

On the other hand, more and more people are using personal cars for transport, which is justified...

To sum up, the government should allocate money for public transport to make them reliable, comfortable and cheap...
Band: 5.5
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Word Statistics
GroupWord NumberDistinctPercent
All Words22912454%
Top 300 Words111 (48%)48 (38%)43%
300 - 1000 Words50 (21%)29 (23%)58%
Over 1000 Words68 (29%)47 (37%)69%
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Link Words: 17 (including link phrase: 1)
Sentences: Number: 16; Average Length: 87 characters; Words/Sentence: 14
Suggestions:
IELTS Essay Format:
-The essay is less than 250, doesn't match the basic criteria.
-You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has and(8), people(6), public(6), transport(6), private(4), cars(4), should(4); try to decrease duplicated words.
-High-ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing; suggest rephrasing some.
-Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level.