Many offenders commit more crimes after serving the first punishment. Why is this happening, and what measures can be taken to tackle this problem?

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Question:
Many offenders commit more crimes after serving the first punishment. Why is this happening, and what measures can be taken to tackle this problem?
Answer Hints:
You need to answer two questions: the reasons and the solutions. They are difficult questions for most IELTS writers to answer in a way with logic or political correctness. However, your reasons and the solutions should have connections.

Causes
  • The first punishment is too light; offenders aren't afraid law.
  • Prison doesn't correctly educate prisoners. Instead, prisoners share crime experiences with each other.
  • After the prisoner is back in society, it is difficult to be accepted.
  • The root cause of the first crime still exists.
  • The circumstance is even worse than before first entering prison.
Solutions
  • The law should punish those who break it with higher efficiency.
  • Prison shouldn't be a place to exchange crime experiences and skills.
  • Prison should help prisoners prepare back to normal life before out.
  • Communities need special channels to help ex-convicts reenter.
Answer 1
Some cases show that ex-convicts commit crimes again after they leave prison. The reasons may be various and complicated, but by looking into them, we can find out a few measures which can be taken to solve this problem.
Firstly, in prison, many man with a criminal record is put together in the same building for a ...
By Taohao Lin, 2023-11-20  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 282
Band: 7
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
Task Response:
-Main ideas are relevant, but some would benefit from further development with examples.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-Each paragraph has a clear central topic, which is developed, and there is an effective use of cohesive devices.
Lexical Resources:
-There is a wide range of vocabulary, used appropriately and naturally.
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-A variety of complex structures is used with some flexibility and accuracy.
Answer 2
Some criminals indeed commit crimes again after they have been punished. While there are several reasons for this alarming trend, some effective measures can be taken by governments to tackle this problem.
There are two main reasons for re-offenders. Firstly, the prison system can make the situation worse. Criminals ...
By Rick Lee, 2023-11-20  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 260
Band: 6.5
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
Task Response:
-The main ideas are relevant, but some are insufficiently developed. The conclusion is unclear and needs to enhance.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-There is a clear overall progression in the response, but somewhat mechanically, with occasional errors
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Lexical Resources:
-The range of vocabulary is quite wide and shows awareness of collocation.
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-There is a mix of simple and complex sentence forms.
Answer 3
People believe that the majority of offenders restart crime even if they have to spend time in prison. There are umpteen reasons behind this notion. In the upcoming paragraphs, this essay will discuss the reason and take some measures to ameliorate this problem.
Undoubtedly, the predominant cause behind this issue ...
By jarry , 2020-11-09  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 368
Band: 6
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
Task Response:
-All parts of the prompt are addressed, and a position is presented that is directly relevant to the prompt.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-Each paragraph has a clear central topic, which is developed, and there is an effective use of cohesive devices.
Lexical Resources:
-There is a good range of vocabulary, and there are some less common words and phrases. However, sentences and logics aren't fluent enough to get a higher score.
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-Grammatical control is variable: some complex structures are produced accurately.
Answer 4
Even after being released from prison, a few people continue to do unlawful acts. Poverty is seen as the main reason for this, and job opportunities could help alleviate this problem.
Most prisoners come from the lower class of society. According to an article from Time Magazine, researchers show that the crime ...
By Andy, 2020-11-12  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 284
Band: 6
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
Task Response:
-The prompt is not fully addressed, there is an attempt to discuss the cause, but ideas are limited. Its reasoning should be enhanced.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-The organization is logical, and there is a clear central topic to each paragraph.
Lexical Resources:
-The range of vocabulary is sufficient to allow some flexibility and precision, and it shows an awareness of styles and collocation.
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-There is a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but there are a few errors in grammatical control.
Answer 5
In contemporary society, many lawbreakers violate rules and laws more than once. Understanding why this phenomenon happens and how to reverse this trend is essential.
There are a few reasons for this problem. First of all, many criminals cannot receive enough education to obtain the necessary skills in imprisonment ...
By nomoreIETLS, 2020-03-06  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 253
Band: 5.5
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
Excellent writing skills, but you should restructure the paper as an IELTS-style essay. You need to add a conclusion to end the essay.
Answer 6
Nowadays, the number of people arrested steadily growing up, wherein more than half of them already have a criminal record. Jail not only does not change prisoners' views but also degrades prisoners' social abilities. After arrest, there are no choices, and are forced to commit a crime a second time. The best way to ...
By kuba, 2020-11-10  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 288
Band: 5
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
Task Response:
-All parts of the prompt are addressed, and a position is presented that is directly relevant to the prompt.,
Coherence and Cohesion:
-The organization is evident; however, the answer lacks contextualization, and cohesion within sentences is sometimes faulty.
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Lexical Resources:
-The lexical resource is limited, but just about adequate for the task, try to enhance IELTS vocabulary.
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Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-There are attempts to produce complex structures, but these usually contain errors.
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