In some countries, people are no longer allowed to smoke in many public places and office buildings

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Question:
In some countries, people are no longer allowed to smoke in many public places and office buildings. Do you think this is a good rule or a bad rule?
Answer 1
There is no scope for any doubt that 'Smoking is injurious to health.' Taking this fact into consideration, many countries have taken action to prohibit smoking in public places strictly...

First of all, smoking affects not only the health condition of smokers but also nonsmokers through a process called passive smoking...

Secondly, smoking in public places like schools, parks, shopping complexes, beaches, offices, etc., tends to develop an intense desire among the young generation to inculcate this habit...

Finally, by discouraging smoking in outdoor areas, smokers can be gradually forced to quit their habit or reduce the number of cigarettes being smoked...

In conclusion, I strongly recommend that all countries put forward this rule for the health and well-being of their public...
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Answer 2
Smoking is not only injurious to the health of the smoker but also dangerous for his neighbors. Hence, lawmakers have prohibited smoking in numerous places, including gathering venues and public buildings...

Smoking causes many health issues to others, especially whoever is near the smoker. When a smoker smokes in the public arena, the individuals in the surrounding region inhale the fume of the burning cigarettes...

Smoking could be one of the reasons for fire mishaps if smoking is allowed in public places. Sometimes, the smokers carelessly burn the objects near them...

In conclusion, smoking causes not only health-related issues to the smoker but also causes many problems to others, in the way of ailments and fire accidents...
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Answer 3
Few people state smoking has any benefit. Not smoking in public places and office buildings is an excellent rule...

We all know smoking is not healthy. Unfortunately, when smokers can smoke in public buildings, they can make other people sick...

Banning smoking in office buildings can also increase worker productivity. Smokers won't interrupt their work all the time to smoke...

Finally, banning smoking in public places and office buildings is a good idea because a ban can reduce conflicts...

It seems clear that banning smoking in public places and office buildings is a good idea. It will reduce conflict and increase productivity...
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Link Words: 23 (including link phrase: 2)
Sentences: Number: 26; Average Length: 73 characters; Words/Sentence: 12
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IELTS Essay Format:
-You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has will(11), smoking(10), and(9), they(9), smokers(8), public(7), buildings(6); try to decrease duplicated words.
-High-ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing; suggest rephrasing some.
-Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level.
Answer 4
Smoking in public places is banned by law in many parts of the world over the past few decades. Nowadays, there is a heated debate about whether this rule is good or bad...

Due to cigarette smoking, many people suffer from respiratory diseases such as breathing difficulty, asthma, and many more...

Furthermore, as tobacco smoking is an addiction, many individuals get distracted and need frequent breaks for smoking during working hours...

To conclude, It is undeniable that smoking kills thousands of people every year; enforcing the smoking prohibition rule is a better choice...
Band: 6
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