Eating is one of the keys to our health. Food safe has become extremely challenging for many of us over the recent past. In contrast, either traditional food or modern fast food may cause health issues for several reasons or be harmful to our bodies. This essay will elaborate on the reasons as to why we cannot avoid ...
Band: 7The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.Task Response:
-The main ideas are relevant, but some are insufficiently developed. The topic isn't just for fast food.Coherence and Cohesion:
-Each paragraph has a clear central topic, which is developed, and there is an effective use of cohesive devices.Lexical Resources:
-The range of vocabulary is quite wide and shows awareness of collocation.Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-There is a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, with a fair degree of accuracy.