It has been suggested that everyone in the world wants to own a car, a TV, and a fridge. Do you think the disadvantages of such a development outweigh the advantages?

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Question:
It has been suggested that everyone in the world wants to own a car, a TV, and a fridge. Do you think the disadvantages of such a development outweigh the advantages?
Answer Hints:
Pros and cons question. Notice that the key to the topic is "everyone owns a car."

Advantages
  • Convenience in traffic and living
  • Higher efficiency in time
  • Easy living and real-time information
  • Stimulate supply
  • Promote the economy
Disadvantages
  • Cars are used excessively, wastes energy
  • Too many cars impact the environment
  • Frozen food in the fridge may hurt the health
  • Children spend too much time on TV and game
Answer 1
Some people believe everyone worldwide wants to own a car, a TV, and a fridge. Most of these commodities are common in everyone's home...

Let's begin with the advantages of having these items. Firstly, having a personal car can provide convenient and speedy traveling...

On the other hand, there are also disadvantages to owning such items. First, the growing number of cars on roads can cause traffic congestion and reduce travel speed...

In conclusion, the necessity of attaining such things can be evident in having a better lifestyle...
Band: 7
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Link Words: 32 (including link phrase: 4)
Sentences: Number: 21; Average Length: 96 characters; Words/Sentence: 15
Suggestions:
IELTS Essay Format:
-High-ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing; suggest rephrasing some.
-Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level.
-Suggest refining coherence and cohesion by removing wordy linking words.
Task Response:
-All parts of the prompt are addressed, and a position is presented that is directly relevant to the prompt. Notice the key to the question is about 'one owning a car,' not just with or without a car.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-Ideas are generally arranged coherently, and there is a clear overall progression.
Lexical Resources:
-A wide range of vocabulary is used appropriately and naturally.
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-Grammatical control is variable: some complex structures are produced accurately.