Large companies should pay CEOs and executives higher salaries than other workers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Question:
Large companies should pay CEOs and executives higher salaries than other workers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Answer Hints:
It's an agree-and-disagree question, but you cannot answer simply with yes or no. Partially agreeing is relatively easy to write.

Agree
  • Large companies need high-quality leadership. Low salaries cannot hire suitable talents.
  • CEOs and executives play critical roles in a company's success.
  • CEOs and executives' compensations are usually deserved for their contribution.
  • Higher salaries of leadership help to up the wage level of the whole company.
Disagree
  • Individuals can save or destroy a company, no matter how much they are paid. The latter has even more examples.
  • A fair employee salary system for all people is critical to the company's success.
  • Hige compensations should link to contributions and performance, not simply to position.
Answer 1
The issue of executive pay has long been a topic of debate. Some argue that large companies should pay their CEOs and executives higher salaries than other workers. I partially agree with the view and will provide my own opinions here.
At first, the market determines executive pay. CEOs and executives have unique ...
By Wujuny Doors, 2023-04-13  View full answer - Revised by tutor
Total words: 263
Band: 6
The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.
Task Response:
-The main ideas are extended and supported; the response is ok. However, the structure has room to improve. You may divide the second paragraph into two and let the 'partially' support point 'fair wage for all' in a separate paragraph.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-The organization is evident and cohesive devices are used, though rather mechanically.
Lexical Resources:
-Lexis is mainly appropriate for the task, though there are some errors in word choice.
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-There is a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, and although errors occur, they rarely reduce communication.