Large companies should pay CEOs and executives higher salaries than other workers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Question:
Large companies should pay CEOs and executives higher salaries than other workers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Answer Hints:
It's an agree-and-disagree question, but you cannot answer simply with yes or no. Partially agreeing is relatively easy to write.

Agree
  • Large companies need high-quality leadership. Low salaries cannot hire suitable talents.
  • CEOs and executives play critical roles in a company's success.
  • CEOs and executives' compensations are usually deserved for their contribution.
  • Higher salaries of leadership help to up the wage level of the whole company.
Disagree
  • Individuals can save or destroy a company, no matter how much they are paid. The latter has even more examples.
  • A fair employee salary system for all people is critical to the company's success.
  • Hige compensations should link to contributions and performance, not simply to position.
Answer 1
The issue of executive pay has long been a topic of debate. Some argue that large companies should pay their CEOs and executives higher salaries than other workers...

At first, the market determines executive pay. CEOs and executives have unique skills and expertise critical to the company's success...

Furthermore, executive pay should be tied to the company's performance. CEOs and executives should not be compensated for simply holding the position...

In conclusion, some argue that large companies should pay their CEOs and executives higher salaries than other workers; I agree partially but believe this should only be the case to a certain extent...
Band: 6
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Word Statistics
GroupWord NumberDistinctPercent
All Words25911343%
Top 300 Words113 (43%)39 (34%)34%
300 - 1000 Words51 (19%)27 (23%)52%
Over 1000 Words95 (36%)47 (41%)49%
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Link Words: 22 (including link phrase: 0)
Sentences: Number: 17; Average Length: 94 characters; Words/Sentence: 15
Suggestions:
IELTS Essay Format:
-You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has and(13), should(8), pay(7), executives(6), that(6), their(6), ceos(6); try to decrease duplicated words.
-High-ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing; suggest rephrasing some.
-Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level.
-Suggest refining coherence and cohesion by removing wordy linking words.
Task Response:
-The main ideas are extended and supported; the response is ok. However, the structure has room to improve. You may divide the second paragraph into two and let the 'partially' support point 'fair wage for all' in a separate paragraph.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-The organization is evident, and cohesive devices are used, though mechanically.
Lexical Resources:
-Lexis is mainly appropriate for the task, though there are some errors in word choice.