Achieving a balance between work and other aspects of life can be challenging for many people for various reasons. In the essay, I will present some obvious causes and discuss how to handle this puzzle.
The first is economic and living pressures. Societal and workplace expectations often create stress for ...
Band: 6.5The below version has fixed some obvious lexical and grammatical defects. The band is by the revised version, but comments are based on the original version.Task Response:
-The main ideas are relevant, but some are insufficiently developed. The solution part is weak; the essay's structure isn't balanced.Coherence and Cohesion:
-Ideas are generally arranged coherently, and there is a clear overall progression.Lexical Resources:
-Lexis is mainly appropriate for the task, though there are some errors in word choice.Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-There is a good range of complex structures, and many sentences have accurate grammar and punctuation.