Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions, like nurses, doctors, and teachers.

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Question:
Successful sports professionals can earn much more than those in other important professions, like nurses, doctors, and teachers. Some people think it is fully justified, while others believe it is unfair. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Answer Hints:
This is a basic fact that society already accepts. So choosing it's fair is easy to write.

Support
  • Sports professionals are special talent, not a generic job.
  • They need hard and long-term training.
  • They take more challenge, risk, and sacrifice than many other careers.
  • They usually retire early, even in 20 or 30.
  • They create huge benefits for their bosses and society.
  • Some of them are models to encourage youth to grow up.
Oppose
  • A few sports professionals' rewards are much beyond their contribution.
  • Some occupations, especially not marketize ones, exists a big gap in comparison, e.g NBA stars and high school PE teachers.
Answer 1
People have separate views regarding the huge earnings of successful sports professionals. While some people think these sports stars deserve a high salary, I believe this is unfair when other influential professionals are not earning as much...

It is a known fact that the career lifespan of sports professionals is short compared to other occupations...

On the other hand, other professionals earn much less than sports athletes despite the vital roles they play in society...

In conclusion, there are logical reasons to justify sports professionals' high salaries, but in my opinion, they are overpaid compared to other professionals who make much more valuable contributions to society...
Band: 7
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IELTS Essay Format:
-You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has sports(8), professionals(8), other(6), their(5), they(5), people(4), earn(4); try to decrease duplicated words.
-High-ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing; suggest rephrasing some.
-Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level.
Answer 2
The world of sports is a multimillion-dollar industry. Around the globe, people flock to sporting events or watch their favorite teams faithfully each week on television...

On the one hand, sport is viewed as a professional career in which the top players should rightly earn high salaries...

On the other hand, various professions contribute to making our world run smoothly. Doctors put in at least ten years of grueling study and internship; their work saves lives...

In my view, paying enormous salaries to sportspeople is unnecessary. We must reconsider our social priorities and eliminate the significant disparity in income received by diverse professionals...
Band: 7
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Answer 3
Nobody can deny that certain professionals like nurses, doctors, and teachers are essential to the fabric of society and should, therefore, be rewarded accordingly...

First of all, not all film stars earn vast sums of money. In fact, at any one time in the UK, for example, roughly 80 percent of actors are out of work, and the number who are paid so-called "telephone number fees" is even smaller...

Stating criteria for how much people should be paid is not easy. The idea of performance-related pay is very much in vogue at the moment...

Whatever criteria are used to assess salaries, an ongoing cycle will develop. It will create pressure in other areas...
Band: 6
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Answer 4
As a result of constant media attention, sports professionals in my country have become stars and celebrities, and those at the top are paid huge salaries...

Many people find their rewards unfair, especially when comparing these super salaries with those of top surgeons, research scientists, or even leading politicians responsible for governing the country...

Those who feel that sports stars' salaries are justified might argue that the number of professionals with natural talent is very few, and the money is a recognition of the skills and dedication a person needs to be successful...

I think that the amount of money such sports stars make is more justified than the huge earnings of movie stars, but at the same time, it indicates that our society places more value on sports than more essential professions and achievements...
Band: 6
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Answer 5
Payments in separate fields are very different. It's a common debate among people, especially in our age...

To begin with, I bear in mind that nurses, doctors, and teachers play a sustainable role in society because, without them, the population would be uneducated and exposed to health risks...

A measure to the statement above could be creating a taxation scheme based on the importance of the work...

To sum up, it can be easy to notice the indifference from people to certain workers such as teachers, nurses, and doctors, and this should not be encouraged in the future...
Band: 5.5
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