Some people advocate the death penalty for those who commit violent crimes. Others say that capital punishment is unacceptable in contemporary society.

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Question:
Some people advocate the death penalty for those who commit violent crimes. Others say that capital punishment is unacceptable in contemporary society. Describe the advantages and disadvantages of the death penalty and give your opinion.
Answer Hints:
It would help if you described both advantages and disadvantages before giving your opinion.

Advantages
  • The death penalty has been an effective tool to control extreme crime for thousands of years.
  • It helps to comfort the victims, especially those who lost loved ones in brutal crimes.
  • If no death penalty, it's hard to establish a fair and convinced law.
Disadvantages
  • No one can guarantee each death penalty is fair or proper. Any error on them will cause innocent life loss.
  • Some people think death isn't a punishment, so the death penalty doesn't work on them. What they fear may be a life sentence.
Answer 1
Many people believe that the death penalty is necessary to keep the security system efficient in society...

The death penalty can be considered an unsuitable punishment for several reasons. The strongest argument is that we have no right to kill other humans...

However, I believe that capital punishment is necessary in the society. Firstly, it is an effective deterrent to major crimes...

To sum up, although capital punishment has some disadvantages, I think it is the best way of controlling criminals, lessening governmental expenses, and preventing other people from committing crimes...
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Answer 2
There are various ways to punish criminals; the death penalty is the most controversial one. I accept that sometimes, capital punishment is necessary...

On the one hand, supporters say that capital punishment deters crime effectively as people have a fear of the death penalty, which stops them from committing offenses...

On the other hand, I think that capital punishment is not a good way, as innocent people could be wrongly convicted and executed...

In conclusion, I think that we have no right to take another human life, so lifelong imprisonment until death can be a better way to punish criminals...
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Link Words: 17 (including link phrase: 1)
Sentences: Number: 15; Average Length: 105 characters; Words/Sentence: 17
Suggestions:
IELTS Essay Format:
-The conclusion is too simple, rewrite to summarize your points.
-You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has punishment(7), death(6), that(6), capital(6), not(5), and(5), way(4); try to decrease duplicated words.
-High-ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing; suggest rephrasing some.
-Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level.