Some people believe that university education should focus on the skills of employment for the future; others think they should focus on academic study only.

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Question:
Some people believe that university education should focus on employment skills for the future. Others think they should focus on academic study only. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Answer Hints:
You should discuss both views and give your opinion.

Focus on the skills of employment
  • Most students need to hunt for a job after college; universities shouldn't ignore this requirement.
  • Most colleges are for students who just want to get a better education, not for those who want to get academic training.
  • Academic study is just fit for a few people; it only wastes time and money for the majority of students.
Focus on academic study
  • The university's nature is academic study; if not, why do we run universities?
  • University students should prepare for academic study; those who need employment skills can just register for certificate or diploma courses.
  • Not everyone is fit for academic jobs; we need to get candidates through academic courses.
Answer 1
Qualifications and skills are the key players that determine the development of all nations. However, there are two opinions about the curriculum of university education...

Firstly, many highly educated candidates in society are unemployed or underemployed. The reason behind this issue is a lack of skills...

We must adopt training methods like an apprenticeship during the course duration to fill the space...

Finally, qualification and skill are both sides of a coin; both are relevant to the country's development...
Band: 6.5
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Link Words: 18 (including link phrase: 0)
Sentences: Number: 15; Average Length: 114 characters; Words/Sentence: 17
Suggestions:
IELTS Essay Format:
-The introduction seems long, refine sentences.
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-Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level.
Task Response:
-The prompt is not fully addressed; you should present views from two sides of the question.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-The response has a clear overall progression, but it is somewhat mechanical.
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Lexical Resources:
-Lexis is mainly appropriate for the task, though there are some errors in word choice.